Comments for Nanowrimo Winner

Comment on Chapter Twenty-Four: Going Home by plegmund

plegmund — Fri, 05 Feb 2010 07:24:58 +0000

Thanks! Tim Freeborn (remember him?) read some of it and he remarked that there was a lot of dialogue in places, more like a play.

I’ve put a revised and extended version (76,000 words) in for the ABNA contest, as I did with last year’s, so we’ll see where it gets.

Comment on Chapter Twenty-Four: Going Home by lulu

lulu — Wed, 03 Feb 2010 21:08:54 +0000

I thought it was very well-written, but because I kept fearing that something awful was about to happen to the narrator it was a more disturbing read for me than your last one. You are good at this; have you ever thought of writing a play?

Comment on Chapter Twenty-Four: Going Home by Capt. R.

Capt. R. — Fri, 04 Dec 2009 21:45:14 +0000

Bravo! Well done!

Comment on Chapter Twenty-Two: The Singers of Lavordin by Capt. R.

Capt. R. — Tue, 01 Dec 2009 19:24:04 +0000

“Not that it matters”? I believe the task was to write a 50,000 word novel in a month. While you have written 50,000 words, you have not written a complete novel yet! You have usurped the title of Nanowrimo ‘Winner’! J’accuse!

I keed, I keed. Keep going. I want to know where this ends. It’s great stuff.

Comment on Chapter Eighteen: Witnesses by Capt. R.

Capt. R. — Fri, 27 Nov 2009 22:59:03 +0000

Hmm. Yes. Rather.

Comment on Chapter Seventeen: War by Capt. R.

Capt. R. — Thu, 26 Nov 2009 21:25:21 +0000

Almost there!

Comment on Chapter Sixteen: Stilin’s memoirs by Capt. R.

Capt. R. — Thu, 26 Nov 2009 18:49:40 +0000

Er, both actually. Just a bit of concentration required to go back to who was doing what, but that’s likely my fault, not yours. Probably a difficulty of reading this in serial form, going back to what is now a couple weeks behind us.

There were a couple times when I thought I’d missed some quotation marks, though, and wasn’t entirely sure of who was speaking.

No biggie.

Comment on Chapter Sixteen: Stilin’s memoirs by plegmund

plegmund — Thu, 26 Nov 2009 09:48:38 +0000

You mean it gets difficult to keep track of what’s happening – or of who’s saying what? I’ve had some problems myself – I nearly made Stilin refer to Larvartin as ‘my father’ at one point.

But no revising! Not in November, anyway.

Comment on Chapter Sixteen: Stilin’s memoirs by Capt. R.

Capt. R. — Wed, 25 Nov 2009 21:26:22 +0000

Good stuff. You demand a bit of the reader in that middle part there, but that’s fine.

Comment on Chapter Fifteen: Ursin Revealed by Capt. R.

Capt. R. — Tue, 24 Nov 2009 16:15:10 +0000

Indeed. Going quite well.